The game of gods

Darell_Barnes

Fantasy

Synopsis

In a world with gods that live eternally, humans are viewed as amusement and gamble. throughout the history of man kind powers was bestowed upon fitting individuals, and with this God's Game slowly came into existence.

Top Reviews

TheViking5500

Status: c3 3yr

saw your request on the forum so I came and  checked your story out. It's not bad although, some things like in the description and first chapters are quite confusing. Maybe I would recommend and see if you could formulate your description and sentences a bit differently it would be a massive improvement. 
Other than that the story has an interesting concept and if you develop it further the story may become potentially really be good. But as said the way some sentences and things are described need to be fixed, otherwise there is just too much confusion in my opinion.

If you don't use it already, I would recommend you use grammarly. it has a free version and is very helpful

Bunny_Junnie

3yr

Quite interesting story! I just remembered about grandmaster of Marvel universe. As I am a big fan of Marvel, I want to see what will happen to the humans! Great thoughts with nice plot! Keep it up! I appreciate it!

mrant12

Status: c2 3yr

This novel shows GREAT promise. Excellent attempt! Keep writing and keep improving. No matter what happens, do not lose heart and stay strong. The more you write, the smoother it'll be.

Chapter 1: chapter 1: New player

author: Darell Barnes

" What's wrong with you!!" A tall, slender man looking like a silhouette Exclaimed with anger and sadness in his rough and ambiguous voice.

Jojo replied in a fearful and indescribable tone " I didn't do it"

Looking at the dark silhouette in front of him he felt an indescribable coldness run down his spine. "YOU DARE TO KILL THE HEAD MASTER!!" The silhouette looking man said in an enraged voice, he reached for his sword and at the speed of light he sliced Jojo's eyelid.

Without any other choice Jojo used his knowledge of the terrain to his advantage. Taking a short cut to a Cliff and jumping off. Using his powerful legs he jumped to a branch that submitted to gravity. He stood stable as he was preparing to jump to another branch.

Almost their, almost their -

"Ahhhhhh f***" he cursed as he saw the arrow piercing his left arm " RETRIBUTION WILL BE YOURS!!!" he said while he fell into the river

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