I'll guess I'll take the initiative, this is my second attempt at doing a story, please read this and help me by advising the comment section or reviews...
Thanks, I'll do my best for more improvements...
David_Neilsen
Status: c14d
A nice beginning, it will be interesting to see where it leads. The translation is a bit off in terms of grammar and tense and whatnot, and the character comes off sounding a bit nasty as a result, which I don't think was the author's intention.