I'll guess I'll take the initiative, this is my second attempt at doing a story, please read this and help me by advising the comment section or reviews...
Thanks, I'll do my best for more improvements...
4yr
Mel_Aniv
Mel_Aniv
The author's grammar is so awesome and has still room for growth! ✌️ But grammar aside, I am too, lame on it. With more practice and learning, you will improve by leaps and bounds in the future! Read more and you will see the difference. Your novel has potential and don't give up on it yet. As it will be loyal to you until death. Kudos and Peace ✌️
4yr
David_Neilsen
David_Neilsen
A nice beginning, it will be interesting to see where it leads. The translation is a bit off in terms of grammar and tense and whatnot, and the character comes off sounding a bit nasty as a result, which I don't think was the author's intention.