The novel is really good. Just make long words per chaps like 1k to 1.5k words/chap, one paragraph should be short in 3-4 sentences and then separate it. (In mobile ver. it's okay but on PC, it may be long and annoying to some. Not me tho)
But it's your novel not mine or to them...
Keep going and keep improving like I do as a novel writer.
Good luck fellow, Author💕