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Hey there thanks for asking me to take a look at your story. There’s only one chapter so not much to comment of amount of updates, story building, development, and world background. The writing did make me feel emotions like anger, sadness, and pity so kudos to the author for being able to bring out emotions from readers to relate to pain of being betrayed by a loved one. Not sure if this is heading towards revenge but it seems like it. Revenge stories are usually tricky so hopefully you are able to tacke it well if you go that route. Writing is well and emotions are the best part from main FL. Perhaps only complaint is dialogue felt too long sometimes and could be shortened for more back and forth talk :)

Nice going! Writing quality is good. And the most interesting thing about this novel is that it brings the readers close to the FL and lets them feel her emotions although it is still the 2nd chapter. But one thing is that you should keep thoughts in '...' like this. It will better differentiate them from others. But anyway great story. Love it. Just now felt her anxiety due to her naiveness. Good work. keep it up.